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Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development?

#universities #offer #courses #internet #people #study #development
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this
 day and age,
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studying
university
class
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classes
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 online is available since that many
collegies
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colleges
college
strat
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start
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 to share
class
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 on
internet
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. I take the view that
this
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To begin
 with, some people didn'
t
 complete their undergraduate degree because they
coudn'
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couldn't
t
 attend
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university
.
For example
, women who
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got married
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 small age, and they have children
coudn'
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couldn't
t
 leave
thier
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their
there
 children for a long time with someone
espically
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especially
that
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since
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 the
university
class
 each day take
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minimum
minmam
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a minmam
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5
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of 5
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hours.
Hence
, the online classes give those women the
opportunites
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opportunity
 to attend from
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their
 houses when they don'
t
 need to leave
thier
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their
 children.
Moreover
, the area in
university
biluding
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building
 is limited.
Although
 some
collegies
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colleges
 are big and the classes can
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holed
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hold
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 more than 200
student
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students
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 generally,
this
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considered
 as limited area
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compared
compare
 to the number of
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students
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 that
want
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 to study at
university
 especially in huge towns with few
college
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colleges
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.
As a result
 of that, some
student
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students
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 cannot take
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a class
the class
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class
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classes
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.
Therefore
, the chance to study in college will increase due to
this
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improvement
 which
considered
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as
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an advantage.
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Furthermore
, studying online is
esaier
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easier
 than
taking
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talking
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 face to face classes because the
student
dont
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don't
 need to go to
university
, buy
srudy
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study
sturdy
 tools or clothes, wake up early.
This
 can be a factor in
encoraging
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encouraging
 more
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students
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 to attend
the
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college.
As a result
 of that, the
educaton
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education
 level will improve. In
counclusion
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conclusion
, even though not all
collegies
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colleges
college
provied
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provided
provide
this
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surveys
, it is a good thing too unable the students learn via the internet.
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