Family has a great influence on children’s development. However, the influence from outside the home plays a bigger part in children’s life. Do you agree or disagree?
One of the main
role
on Change to a plural noun
roles
children
of growing is
household’s condition but we have to pay a little attention to outdoors Correct your spelling
his
impacts
on children’s
flourishment. I agree that both of
influences, so indoors and outdoors, can Change preposition
apply
be impact
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be impacted
be impacting
to
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apply
children’s
physical and mental
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mentally
healthy
.
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health
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of scholars have been searching and doing variety Correct article usage
The majority
experiences
on Change preposition
of experiences
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a child
child
about Fix the agreement mistake
children
children’s
development
since eighteenth
and nineteenth Add an article
the eighteenth
century
. More precisely, Fix the agreement mistake
centuries
the
one Correct article usage
apply
of
interesting measure is Change preposition
apply
growing
of Correct article usage
the growing
children
in the
contemporary science. Either family or environment can be more impact on Correct article usage
apply
children’s
mental development
.
Firstly
, we have to identify a primary development
for children’s
growing due to household’s influence is exaggerated by our society. When every child commence
to observe or absorb Change the verb form
commences
firstly
on environment
and everything, he/she is getting numerous information from his/her family. According to Add an article
the environment
psychological
and financial condition of generation commence Add an article
the psychological
to determine
a child’s future life and primary attitudes. If we follow a modern Change the verb form
determining
searching
about Replace the word
search
child’s
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a child’s
behavior
, Change the spelling
behaviour
majority
of people will observe that the child who grows in Correct article usage
the majority
happy
family is more kind, friendly, justice, Add an article
a happy
exc
.
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etc
On the other hand
, we have to demonstrate the influence from outside in children’s
life. I consider that if the family is a role of foundation for children
, out impacts
is the most essential for obtaining success what connect with future. While children
was
going to kinder garden or other places, they have been a chance for communicating with others. More preciously, during Change the verb form
were
children
communicate each others
, abilities Change to a singular noun
other
of speaking
, explaining, listening start to flourish for them due to out influences is one of the main Replace the preposition
to speak
impacts
for development
.
To conclude, we must be cautious and careful for growing children
and try to avoid Change the pronoun
their
them
negative Correct your spelling
the
impacts
. Because they are our future.Submitted by abbasoveli on
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