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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010
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The
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tow
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two
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 map below
illustrate
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the road
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road
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roads
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 interring to the
city
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 hospital in seven years of
period
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the period
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 time
of
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between
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 2007 and 2010. Over the period, the
area
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 witnessed dramatic changes in roads, parking lots,
bus
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and bus
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 stop
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area
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areas
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. In the past, there were
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tow
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two
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 main roads in the
center
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centre
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,
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City
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the City
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road
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 crossed by
hospital
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the hospital
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road
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. In the New map,
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 of
roundabout
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the roundabout
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 has been
add
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 in the same
area
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.In 2007, there was a car park
to
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 staff and
public
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the public
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in
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 the
west
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 side
to
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hospital
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the hospital
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road
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 in
one
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 location. But now, there are
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tow
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two
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 parking spots,
one
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 for the staff biased the hospital
road
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 from the
west
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 and the
city
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road
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 from the north, and the other
one
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 for
public
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 in the east facing the
city
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 hospital from
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west
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.
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, the bus stop
area
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 from 2007 has been made bigger by 2010
in
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west
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the west
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 side from
hospital
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the hospital
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road
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at
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one
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 side only. Can we sum up by saying:
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, the
the
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city
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 hospital has clearly become more civilized than it was ever before
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tow, road, city, area, west, one with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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