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Language barriers causes difficulty in people moving moving to foreign countries. Discuss

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There is no doubt that the
language
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 barrier for an immigrant is the top priority of their problems to solve. I entirely agree with
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 point of view that lack of
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 causes many issues for
immigrants
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, so I mention some of these problems. The lack of
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 competence causes a lot of problems, and I want to discuss the main issues that
immigrants
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 ought to confront in their social
life
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lives
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. First of all, Nowadays,
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 competence has become more than ever necessary. The people who
immigrant
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 to another
country
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 have more experience than anyone.
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issue
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 may cause numerous tackle in everyday life. The
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 barrier may cause plenty of points for
unfamiliar
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those unfamiliar
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 with the host
country
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's culture. It can cause a lot of misunderstanding, and any simple word or body
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 lead to misapprehension and, in some
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scenarios
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,
make
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create
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 an awkward situation that creates an unpleasant situation for
immigrant
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immigrants
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.
Due to
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 a lack of
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 competence, new
arrival
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arrivals
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becomes
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become
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 more and more isolated, and
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 could even be dangerous for society if I want to be highly pessimistic.
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, research showed that
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criminal
statistic
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statistics
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has
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have
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 increased, especially in minor communities of
immigrants
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 who have been left out of society because of differences in culture and
language
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.
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, these days we have to be conscious that
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issue
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 does not belong to a specific
country
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 or city.
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 is a world problem. In conclusion, as I see
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issue
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,
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 is a universal problem, and all governments ought to have a new approach to deal with
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 problem and study
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 with unique aspects. As a person who had the same experience, it was tough to settle down in a new
country
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 without knowing
their
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language
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 and culture. I believe that the only way which
carries
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make
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out
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apply
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this
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issue
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 bearable is
that
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for
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immigrants
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 should have basic knowledge about the
country
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's
language
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 that they tend to move
in
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into
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it
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apply
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.

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