Modern technology has promoted easy and fast access to information. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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machineries
brought humongous benefits to lead a flexible and standard life. Boosting knowledge and enhancing
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intelligence with updated ideas are simple by the blessings of
technology
.Accessibility to be informed is effortless and its benefits outweigh the disadvantages.The following passages provide an overview of both the advantages and the throwbacks that come about
as a result
of
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equipments
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.
To begin
with, forwarded
machinaries
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machineries
machines
assist
people
to contact with their family and friends within a
munite
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minute
which was not imaginable over a decade
also
.
For instance
, mobile phone, laptop and different apps
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people
to communicate
others
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with
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small expense even some apps provide free services.
Secondly
, unless
people
get enough time to expose their feelings and thoughts with their loving
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real time
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,they can share these through social media.
Thirdly
, numerous apps like calculator,
calander
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calendar
, clock and so on provided us
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services with
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latest mobile phone, so that , we could mobilize our schedules without any obstacles.
Moreover
,
technology
brings the entire world very closer to us , study and work can easily
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being at home with zoom or google meet app.
On the contrary
, there are some disadvantages bought about by
technology
. Many
people
concede themselves to spend their spare time by playing
vedio
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video
games or by scrolling Facebook which has been creating a negative impact on their relationship.
For example
,
people
could not build a close and understanding attitude with their relatives and
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due to their busyness with gadgets.
Furthermore
, they are going to be dependable on latest
machinaries
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machineries
like washing machine,
vaccume
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vacuum
cleaner, Dishwasher,
as a result
, if any one of
these equipment
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will not work that will make their day worse. In conclusion, development demands modern
technology
, so being apart from these gadgets we could not even think our country's revolutionary improvement.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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