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In the furture , nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extant do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#furture #nobody #newspapers #books
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Since the middle of
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 century with the development of
technology
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increasing
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 number of
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can
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not buy printed newspaper or
books
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 and they want online without paying .
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 of
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 ,a group of
people
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 hold the opinion that whatever human used to printed newspaper or online .in my opinion ,I agree with
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 view .
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 it has to be admitted that
technology
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 networks bring convenience to
people
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 is the driving force why I agree
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 is largely due to the that the progress of science and
technology
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 provides
people
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 with convenience ,
people
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 can use computers or mobile phones to browse information ,the network can learn a lot of knowledge
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 can be exemplified by the case of online since through the network can learn a lot of knowledge ,when
people
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 do not go out ,you can learn and understand new knowledge ,and many online
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 is free ,so that the community has
progress
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 but
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 enhance
people
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 love. Undoubtedly I think that online and
technology
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 to make progress of society By the same
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 a large of
people
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 like to online study because of ,
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 is convenience online read is
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 a contributing factor why I support
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 view.
People
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 used to
printed
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 or
books
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 ,in current society
people
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 tend to
printed
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print
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newspapers or
books
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 ,I agree because I feel learn and can collect and have my own library
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therefore
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 ,I think online reading is
waste
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a waste
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 and
achievements
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,so that, why I support
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 opinion. To sum up I
agree
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 the view that
people
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used
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 to reading
books
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of
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online .in order to have a better online reading .everyone should take
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 into serious consideration so that we can have a bright future.
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