Some people believe that those moving to abroad should try to adopt themselves to the new cultures while others think there is no need to do so. Discuss both the views and give your opinion

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Transitioning and adapting to a new environment is essential for human adaptation. The more that you resist, the higher you will struggle. I personally believe that those moving abroad should be adaptable and adjust to new cultures. I will discuss and give my justification

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the essay below. Each country has its own culture. Some cultures are still highly

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to a new culture. The skill of flexibility will provide some advantages to a newbie in a particular area. Personally, I agree that to fully enjoy and survive a new country and to be well accepted as well by its citizen, a new migrate should learn how to adapt

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Grammatical Range: 5.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

integration
acceptance
community
customs
language
societal norms
cultural barriers
culture shock
heritage
identity
local way of life
multicultural
diversity
fusion
positive cultural exchange
unfamiliar environment
appreciation
respect
expat communities

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