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Some people believe that those moving to abroad should try to adopt themselves to the new cultures while others think there is no need to do so. Discuss both the views and give your opinion

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Transitioning and adapting to a new environment is essential for human adaptation. The more that you resist, the higher you will struggle. I personally believe that those moving abroad should be adaptable and adjust to new cultures. I will discuss and give my justification
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 to a new culture. The skill of flexibility will provide some advantages to a newbie in a particular area. Personally, I agree that to fully enjoy and survive a new country and to be well accepted as well by its citizen, a new migrate should learn how to adapt
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • integration
  • acceptance
  • community
  • customs
  • language
  • societal norms
  • cultural barriers
  • culture shock
  • heritage
  • identity
  • local way of life
  • multicultural
  • diversity
  • fusion
  • positive cultural exchange
  • unfamiliar environment
  • appreciation
  • respect
  • expat communities
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