2. We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is often that society argues about whether help everybody in the world at least a little bit or some people say just worry about the province you live in and your nation. But worrying about things you don't have to like helping people you don't even know is nonsense ,

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worry about the nation and province you live in. It might sound so cruel, but In my opinion, I totally agree with

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which just cares about your state and the provincial that you live in, the particular reason for the circumstance we need to solve our problems in our provincial and communities

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. There are lots of problems in the country where you live in.

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, helping our communities and countries is more realistic, so that way we able to save our finance and time

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Lexical resource: 6.0

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

global interconnectivity
international cooperation
ethics
moral obligation
geographical borders
diplomatic relations
economic stability
global security
resource allocation
expertise
international aid
dependency and development
sustainable solutions
local and global initiatives
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