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Some people say that Ebooks and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines to what extent do you agree or disagree.

#people #ebooks #technology #newspaper #magazines
Technology is flourishing by leaps and bounds and providing us with new avenues
while
 keeping
ourselves
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 updated with the latest broadcast and current affairs.
Therefore
, a fair amount of people believe a conventional way of journal reading will
be disappeared
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. I do not completely
accord
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agree
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 with it because a conventional paper of news is the easiest and cheapest way to get news. To embark on, there are multiple reasons why the traditional ways of getting reports are still popular. First of all, reading the newspaper has become the ardent habit of many people. Everyone whether from the affluent or middle class
are
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 seen desperately waiting for paper in
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morning and
enjoy
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enjoying
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 it reading with a cup of tea.
Moreover
, these are the portable, cheapest the easiest
way
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ways
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 of knowing about
the
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global activities. It can be carried from one place to
other
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another
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 in
the
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 bag and
available
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 at an economical price. It is so handy and merely by continuing
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flip of pages can make you omniscient.
Secondly
, electricity and other appliances are not required.
Moreover
, the other attachments are like icing on the cake.
For instance
, the Hindustan
times
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Times
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 has multiple attachments like women’s fashion, career guide, culinary art and so on.
However
, undoubtedly, technology has given
the
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 radical approach to reading
announcement
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announcements
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, for example, videos provide a full and clear view
to
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of
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 reading
besides
 that we can download, share and forward
it
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them
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 to our relatives and friends. Needless to say
that
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technophobic
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technophobia
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 will
be having
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have
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 no place in
this
 ever-advanced modern world.
To conclude
, the lives of people are drastically affected by advanced versions of
the
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technology yet, in my opinion, it will not be able to pose
threat
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a threat
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 to the existence of
a
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traditional press and magazines.
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