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Some say you should always marry for love; others say that in an uncertain world it is wiser to marry for money. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

Marriage has always been a difficult concept for human beings. Those who are against love
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 consider it
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merely breeding and reproduction, or even a wealth opportunity;
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 other people might argue that every soul has its own soulmate. We will discuss
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 topic deeply in the case of wealth, happiness, and personality growth.
To begin
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 with, I'd like to point
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 importance of a good salary and making a fortune in life. We all love money
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 we admire those who help us gain it. From our early youth, we begin wondering whether we can provide our own daily allowance. In
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 a case, having a marital relationship for the mere sake of money can be beneficial.
On the other hand
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, happiness can not only be achieved by
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 wages but
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 through having a soulmate. As humans, we face ups and downs on a daily basis. The task of dealing with
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 massive and energy-consuming. Having someone on our side through thick and thin can be a
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 luck. And
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, the significance of one's mental health and personality growth cannot be ignored. Humans are
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 species. We long for mutual communication. We need people around us to talk and grow together. Considering
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 factor, the value of having somebody to communicate with is of significant importance to us. In conclusion, having all these concepts in mind, we can conclude that marrying for both money and love can be beneficial. The case is self-explanatory and may be regarded as conclusive.

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task response
State a clear view in the introduction and keep it in the conclusion. Give a strong opinion and back it up with reasons.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear topic sentences for each paragraph and use basic linking words to show steps and contrasts.
content development
Add real life examples or facts to support ideas. Small, clear examples help.
content
The essay tries to discuss both sides of the topic.
structure
There are fast and direct ideas on money and love.
content
There is an idea of balance on money and love and mental health.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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