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Some people think that art lessons, such as painting and drawing lessons, should be compulsory in secondary schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Art
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subjects
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 should be taught to every student in high school. I strongly oppose
this
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 view because these
subjects
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 are not the subject everyone keens to learn about, and there are
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students
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 who are afraid of studying these kinds of
subjects
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. Being forced to learn some lessons that the pupils do not have an interest in, obviously, will have some effects on them. It can make them hate everything about
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 if they have to draw or paint something every week.
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, some
students
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 will feel that they do not obtain any knowledge and it will even make them feel that they are wasting time.
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, in my experience, I did not have any interest in those
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 but I had to study about them, since they were compulsory
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, and the consequence from
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 was I cannot remember any content I learnt.
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, some pupils are scared of studying about
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 subject, due to the method of evaluation. Most of the time, teachers will grade
students
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 by their
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 performance. The pupils who are not an expert on these
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,
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 as drawing, will not be able to cope with some situations. When their teachers make a criticism about their own works and the teachers may show their works to the other
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 or even make fun of them, so it would be better for the
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 to have a choice to choose what subject they desire to learn. In conclusion, I believe that the
students
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 do not have to study about
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 lessons, as there are some
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 who do not want to know how to do
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, and there are
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 some people who do not have the courage to study about it.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • creativity
  • self-expression
  • curriculum
  • mental well-being
  • stress reduction
  • unearth
  • hidden talents
  • compulsory
  • equality
  • disengagement
  • motivation
  • additional resources
  • financial strain
  • core subjects
  • well-rounded
  • critical thinking
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