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Some people think that children should begin their formal education at a very early age. Others think they should begin after 7 years of age. Dicuss both views.

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People assume that offspring should start learning education
such
 as numeracy, literacy and others at the activity of five or six. But some of them consider that scion should be taught from the
youth
 of 7. And now we shall discuss both of views. On the one hand,
this
 is the demand of the modern era. I think that when scion begins to learn at early old maturity, they achieve their goals before their friends do. And
also
, they enter the university than their peers.
For instance
, my uncle's son started to study subjects at the very early growth of three. And
then
, when he went to university, he knew all of the letters in the alphabet. But his classmates were learning the letters at that time at the academy. Learning at a very early
age
 has many benefits
such
 as I mentioned above.
Also
, early learning increases fast-thinking and
this
 leads to thinking more than the
age
 of heir.
Moreover
, early learning influences heir's psychology.
On the other hand
, learning at the
youth
 of
seven
 has benefits too. As a 7-years-old scion understand some rules at the institution.
Furthermore
, in our country going to faculty begins at the maturity of
seven
. Because at the
age
 of
seven
, children can do and go to department independently.
In addition
, 7-years-old children know that how they behave at a seminary.
However
, at the early
age
 of studying has some impacts
such
 as the influence on their psychology and their lifestyle.
Moreover
, early learning leads to negative events during their life.
Furthermore
, learning at the life of
seven
 has negative influences, too,
such
 as they become less thoughtful than those who go early
youth
 of children. In conclusion,
although
 more people consider that offspring should start learning education at an early
youth
, in my opinion, learning education at the maturity of 7 is convenient in all conditions.
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