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The diagram below shows developments made at West park secondary
school
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since its construction are
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after every three decades. Overall, It is clear that many
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are done after every thirty years in order to
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, In 1950 the
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had a basic structure consisting of a small area dedicated
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education. There were houses on the left,
playground
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a playground
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behind the
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also
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a
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farmland at the south-west corner and all
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main road in front when redevelopment took place in the year 1980 the main road,
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building and playground remained untouched.
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were demolished and space for car parking was created and a new science block was constructed .
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formed into a sports field.
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it was again redeveloped in
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,
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time ; main
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building was left undisturbed accompanied with science block.
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car parking has extended by
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containing
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the sports
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field
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