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Prision is the best punishment for criminals. Do you agree or disagree?

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There are so many types of crimes in our life. Ranging from simple crimes to serious crimes: from theft to murder. Each of which will be punished
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. In some countries, anyone who violates the law is punishable by confinement. In
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 essay, I will try to look at the pros and cons of incarceration as a solution to sanction. On the one hand, the advantage of
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 topic is that there is no doubt that confinement is the most effective method if a person has committed a serious evil or has committed another violation. If a person commits a scandal, they should be behind bars and should not be allowed to remain in the community.
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 is important for the safety of every citizen living in our country.
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, there is a disadvantage of
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 statement. In my opinion, prison is probably not the most effective way to punish criminals. Because different types of criminals cannot be kept in the same place. There is a big difference between a murderer and an ordinary thief. It would be better if those who committed a major felony were given a larger type of torture, and those who committed minor lawlessness were given a smaller type of abuse,
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 as a fine. In conclusion, I disagree with the idea that prison is the best method. While confinement is a good way to punish criminals, but it does not always apply to everyone. Just as there are many types of misdeed, the type of abuse must be different.
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