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Some people believe that it is good to shere as much information as possible in scientific research, bussiness, and academic world, others believe that some informations is too important or to valuable to share freely.

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SOME PEOPLE PRESUME THAT IT IS NICE TO SHARE AS MUCH
INFORMATION
 AS WE CAN IN SCIENTIFIC REACH, BUSINESS, AND THE ACADEMIC WORLD,
HOWEVER
, OTHERS THINK THAT SOME
INFORMATION
 IS TOO IMPORTANT OR TOO VALUABLE TO BE SHARED FREELY. IN
THIS
 ESSAY I WILL DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS WITH SOME EXAMPLES ADN EXPLAIN MY OWN OPINION. IN
THIS
 INTERNET SOCIETY, WE CAN GAIN A LOT OF
INFORMATION
 IN SCIENTIFIC REACH COMMERCIAL AND EDUCATION FIELD FOR FREE.
THIS
 IS A GOOD WAY FOR PEOPLE TO LEARN,
FURTHERMORE
, THE SOCIETY WILL BE MORE LIBERAL AS THE
INFORMATION
 IS EASILY ACCESSIBLE.
FOR EXAMPLE
, PEOPLE CAN DO SOME RESEARCH, LEARN SOME
EXPERINCE
Correct your spelling
EXPERIENCE
 FOR OTHERS BEFORE THEY START THEIR OWN BUSINESS, OR, STUDENTS CAN DO SOME STUDY FROM ACADEMIC PLATFORMS TO HELP THEM HAVE BETTER PERFORMANCE,
IN ADDITION
, CREATE MORE IDEALS.
ON THE OTHER HAND
, MUCH OF
INFORMATION
 IS RESULT BY SOME COMPANIES OR RESEARCHERS, THEY SPENT A LOT OF TIME OR COST A LARGE AMOUNT OF MONEY. IF THEY JUST SHARE EVERY
INFORMATION
 WITHOUT PAYMENT,
THIS
 CAN LEAD TO SOME ISSUES,
SUCH
 AS NO PROFITS FOR RUNNING A BUSINESS. IN CONCLUSION, SHARING AS MUCH AS
INFORMATION
 CAN CREATE A LIBERAL SOCIETY,
HOWEVER
, SOME
INFORMATION
 IS TOO IMPORTANT OR TOO VALUABLE
ALSO
 I DO NOT THINK ANYTHING SHOULD BE FREE
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