The range of technology available to people is increasing the gap between the rich and the poor. Others think it has an opposite effect. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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available
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is available
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people
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connect of
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condition
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as like the rich and the poor. In my
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, the range of
technology
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is different, so if we take
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model telephone,
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version can buy only the rich
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, but the poor
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too
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have
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but with less memory and without any function.
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the other hand,
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there are new
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buy the rich
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for example
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if
Iphone
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iPhone
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version all
people
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who have many
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go and
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hurry up
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my
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when rich
womanon
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woman on
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kitchen
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they
want
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buy
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this things
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, children of rich
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stdying
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studying
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they see
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model of watch their schoolchildren, actually they ask their parents to buy that watch.
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other hand, we can notice the
porr
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poor
people
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don't buy
an
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expensive things.
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, all
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connect with money. Any factors influence that
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, some poor peoples have
problem
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with health and they don't work.
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, if they have
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problem
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with
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in fact don't change
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.
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, now I knew some
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families
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problem
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problems
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with elder parents or
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younger
children have
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problem
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. In
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conclusion
, the new
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available to
people
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all
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connect
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of mind
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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