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Public celebrations (national days, festivals) are held in many countries. Some people say that these celebrations are a waste of money and we should spend money on more important things. Do you agree or disagree?

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In many countries in the world, public
celebrations
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 are related to debatable topics and it is linked with political agenda
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. Many counties have been celebrating their own festivals and national
days
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however
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 it should be given priority after the
country
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's
development
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. In my opinion, I partially agree with
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. On one hand, due to various reasons, public
celebrations
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 are essential for the
country
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's
growth
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. It would give awareness about the
country
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 to all around the world. Even though economic
growth
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 is required for every
nation
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 to invest money for the public through conducting national programs, people from the various
nations
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 will visit the
nation
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,
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, the tourism sector of the
country
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 will be great.
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, national
days
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 are celebrated to express our commitment to the persons who have sacrificed their entire life for the
development
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 of the
nation
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.
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, the majority of people never think about the ancient
days
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 of the
country
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 through these kinds of festivals enhance patriotic feel inhuman so they can carry their
nation
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's legacy forward. On another hand, using the
country
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's budget for festivals and national
days
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 or public
celebrations
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 may cause financial problems to the
country
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's economy, rather than spending money on national
celebrations
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 we should invest that amount in the
country
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's upcoming generation's employment and should build a strong foundation for
nations
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 economic
development
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. Due to unwanted expenditure in public
celebrations
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, it may cause a hazardous effect on the budget of the
nation
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,
instead
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 of that
country
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 should prepare some plans and make them in action for the
development
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 of the
country
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 in scientific research, agricultural farming, education, sports etc. it will definitely work for
nations
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growth
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. In conclusion, public
celebrations
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 have their own pros and cons,
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 important to have
nations
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growth
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, cultural ethics etc. peoples are aware of all these things nowadays, so, Important is to give both the things equal value and respect for not to destroy the
country
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's economic situation.
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