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Some people believe that individuals who earn a lot of money are the most successful. Others say that the individuals who contribute to the society (such as scientists or teachers) are the most successful. 🔸Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Write at least 250 words.

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The whole folk dreams they more successful in future because now time cash is important to all.in my opinion I believe that lot of payment is the best successful but other contributors to the culture are more successful. bill is too much important because
this
 time all population depend on
this
 thing.some crowd say that the individuals who contribute to civilization are the most successful but I agree folk who earn a lot of pay are the most successful because if have salary they buy everything in present.example my brother in law was working LLC company they paid in my brother much more salary while owners don't pay good cash for my brother they don't spend good life but now he is very successful in other relatives because he has more payment than and they bay any happiness in the community. Others say that the individuals who contribute to the company are the most successful
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 as a teacher or scientists because they work with others. A teacher is doing well working on children increasing study but the government do not pay good but a tutor is a successful person in countries because they don't depend on one it .as well as they work in the home like a tutor gives the tuition at the home . In my conclusion whole people working in the life because work is important to all . If we are working a good way one day all successful.
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