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In the future, we will have more and more leisure time as machines replace many of the tasks we do at home and work. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Machines
 are devices that perform like it was designed and complete assigned tasks. With the development of technologies,
machines
 can do more and more
work
 for humans. A natural deduction is that
people
 will have more leisure
time
, but it is not as granted as it seems. Throughout history, it’s less likely that
people
 will have more spare
time
. At home, some
machines
 are tools that help
people
 with better
work
, and they refine the quality.
For example
, electric ovens free
people
 from controlling the temperature.
However
, it is just because they are easier to
work
 with that make they are used more often and occupied more
time
 of
people
.
Thus
 we can see that not all
machines
 save
people
time
. At
work
, the application of
machines
 is not likely to shorten the labouring
time
. To be specific, enterprises hire
people
 to run their business, and they are keen to make full use of the employees. It’s more likely for them to fire some
people
 to save the cost rather than give them free
time
. The use of
machines
 will save
time
 on tackling some problems, but we won’t have more
time
 off overall.
On the other hand
, we have to admit that most
machines
 improve productivity, but we have to consider the growing demand when calculating idle hours. The requirement for more and better products always push the improvement of productivity, and
machines
 are made for that.
Thus
 productivity will always be occupied to optimize efficiency. In conclusion, it’s less likely to have more
time
 to do whatever we want despite
machines
 being applied.
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