Medical services should be run by profit-making companies. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Health
care matters is a very imperative
sector
however
some
individual
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urgued
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argued
urged
that
health
services
should be managed by companies that are up for business.As far as am concerned
i
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disagree with
reason
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the reason
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being that
this
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services
will be very expensive and there will be
conflict
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a conflict
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of interest between
patient
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the patient
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and the facility.
Firstly
,
services
would be very costly for a
low income
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earner
patient
to seek
services
from
this
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these
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facilities
thus
the
mortelity
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mortality
rate will be very high in the community as people will seek
services
from other
unreable
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unreliable
sources
such
as
herbalist
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herbalists
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.
For example
,in 2020 it was reported that in the
nation
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newspaper that 80% of
kenyans
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patients with insurance visit private
hospital
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hospitals
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despite representing
very
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small number in the country.
Therefore
, it is prudent
health
sector
be affordable to the public,
this
is because it is a basic need.
Secondly
,there is
conflict
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a conflict
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of interest between patients and the facility
such
that
patient
needs will be taken into depending on what a
patient
can afford.
In addition
,the facility will put more effort
in
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making
profit
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a profit
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rather than taking care of the
patient
such
that
patient
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the patient
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will only receive full
services
depending on what he/she can afford.
For example
,in 2018 it was reported in star times that only 10% of
kenyans
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cancer patients received complete treatment despite 90%
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without complete
treament
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treatment
due to inadequate resources.
Therefore
, it is indispensable not to have
profit making
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company run
health
sector
as
patient
needs will not be met. To sum up,
patient
needs will definitely be met with affordable
health
sector
however
with
health
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sector
being run by
profit making
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profit-making
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companies and
this
will not be achieved
this
is because the priority of
this
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these
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companies will be
profit
.
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