We can not help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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Some

people

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believe that we should help our society rather than other

countries

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and communities

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when we have too many

people

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who need help and support. I partly agree with

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view, because I believe that helping

people

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is the most important issue among different

countries

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. On the one hand, there are

alot

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a lot

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who live in each country that need help. You can see

that disadvantaged and impoverished

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that disadvantaged and impoverished person

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people

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in every

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, even in the wealthiest

countries

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. These

people

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may

be not have

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any food or clothes and the rich can support them easily.

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, by donating

this

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food or clothing we can solve the initial poor's need.

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can

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spend a little amount on

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this problems

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to charities.

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, I believe that boundaries should not be an obstacle

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helping poor

people

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all over the world. In my opinion, in some

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be exist

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some individuals who need the simplest things

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as pure and clean water or even food.

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, in African

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children suffer from curable diseases or they have

malnourish

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. It is clear that we should priorities our

people

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and our society, but in these

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we can help

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beyond our borders

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donating some money to international charities in order to solve

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simple problems. In conclusion, I believe that we should support everyone who needs help whether they are our fellow citizens or they live in other places over the world and even in our neighbourhood.

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