Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

Recently, the concerns about environmental issues increase because of their direct effect
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all of our life aspects. While some believe that
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of specific kinds of trees and
animals
are the most effective
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, I personally think they are by no means the most dangerous one. It must be
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admitted that
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the
diffeciency
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deficiency
or even
extenction
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extinction
of some types of animal or
plants
plays an important role in the environmental concerns.
Animals
and
plants
are very important in both lifecycle and food chains. And to illustrate more, in the past there was a
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country
who decided to kill all the Tigers and wolves to let the rabbits live peacefully,
as a
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the rabbits ate all of the
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therefore
we must keep the balance between the lives of all
animals
and
plants
.
On the other hand
, there are a variety of problems more dangerous and hazardous. Two of the biggest of these threats are air and
water
pollution
. Starting with
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pollution
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caused by gas emissions from factories and exhaust fumes from cars, leading to
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the CO 2 which have it is devastating effects on the planet. Moving to
water
pollution
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a
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main result
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the improper ways of waste disposal by humans and industries in the rivers and oceans.
This
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it is turn
make
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the
water
fills with chemicals
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evaporate and make the chemical rains that affect
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all of the earth. In conclusion, no one can deny that
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the extinction
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of special types of
animals
and
plants
make a problem but it seems to be secondary
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when it comes to air and
water
pollution
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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