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It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

#year #school #university
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These days if pupils would like at least be able to have enough money for their life, they need to get professional
skil
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 in a huge range of different offers after a school. But due to social and economic
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 the new trends became popular,
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 as, to start their
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 education after one
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 of rest. Let’s discuss and find out do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages of taking
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year
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 academic holiday. On the one hand, as soon as pupils finished standing at school,
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 world
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 front of them. And
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, many adults suggests to their Childe to take a rest and enjoy their life before starting
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 learning. In
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 short
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, they do not care about anything, because they no need to think about exams, work tasks, family children and etc, just relax.
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, they have
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 to think about their future and make decisions about which field they would like to work in. In
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 ,case the idea of having a
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 off looks reasonable.
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, the previous idea is just suitable for citizens who live in developed countries or rich families. So if young people from a poor family and has some limitations like less money, which led to a range of problems
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 as he or she has to work more, harder and lack of
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, so he can’t let himself
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have a
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 vocation.
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, if
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 type of person would like to be successful in their life, he needs to be ready for a long way to their target, which requires
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. So, in conclusion, we saw to
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 a
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 off before continuing
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 education has some benefits and lacks, but unfortunately,
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 Idea is not suitable for everyone. And that’s why each one makes own decision to according existing situation and circumstance.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gap year
  • work experience
  • internships
  • traveling
  • life experiences
  • personal development
  • independent
  • self-reliant
  • educational progress
  • graduation timeline
  • financial burden
  • academic momentum
  • structured academic environment
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