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Some people say that the best way to increase road safety is to increase the minimum legal age of driving motorbikes or cars .to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays in
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 contemporary ,era mostly teenagers and
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 some kids used four-wheel or motorbikes for their daily commute. By
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 ,point some individuals say ,there should be an increment in the minimum legal
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 the driving car. I agree with
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 point to a large extent because it is very beneficial for the country as well as for them too. My points about that can be seen in
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 paragraphs. There are various reasons for my agreement. The
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 and foremost reason is that in some undeveloped country the laws regarding
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driving vehicle is not very strict. As in
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 modern ,world most teenagers use their own vehicle for their daily commute. To add to
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 because they have their own cars they show off others by doing some stunts or else by driving at a high speed .
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 of that, they might suffer from detrimental accidents.
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, there is a survey regarding in Indian newspaper that around 54% of people meet to an accident because of the
age
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 like Underage of 18.
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, some steps should take by the government to a serious note for legal
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. I think the centre should make some strict
rules
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 about not driving vehicles under the
age
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 of 18. Some countries have very strict
rules
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 for that while some countries do not take
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 on a serious note and do not follow any
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 ,
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, so many school children under the
age
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 of 18 used their two-wheeler for going school and most of them carry three other children on their vehicle and city police
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 of doing punishment they only enjoy
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 scene. So for that reason so many children meet to an accident.
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 there should be strict
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 regarding driving a car at a legal
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 is compulsory. In conclusion, I agree with these points about increasing the minimum legal
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 to ride any two-wheeler. By taking some steps it improves road safety.
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