It is impossible to help all people in the world, so governments should only focus on people in their own countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is stated that reaching every single
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and helping them is
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vain idea as it is not liable to access all
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living in the remote corners of the world and each
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care of their own citizens. While I agree with the argument to
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extent, I would like to argue that My opinion on the ideas is that there are more than a hundred
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in the contemporary world and each of the
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not have equal circumstances in terms of
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natural resources, technological development or economic power,
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, in turn, the vast majority of
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who live in
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countries
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have ample challenges in their lives. To illustrate, a number of
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located in
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continent cannot provide
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amount of water for some villages in rural areas and a plethora number of children dies every year due to the water shortage. Apart from that, there is no educational infrastructure in some
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due to the fact that they have lagged behind
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technology.
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, a great number of children do not have access to information except books, which are obsolete resources, but most of the articles are published on
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in
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century. I believe that some
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can be unified and
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a non-profit organization to help these
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even though they cannot reach every
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. From another point of view, an intervention into the domestic issues of a
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is done by a foreign
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may lead to some political disputes.
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, every
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has their own laws and
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is not a trivial thing.
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, a government may violate the rules
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be obeyed unconsciously and
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situation
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to some international conflicts.
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, It is widely believed that
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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