People should follow the customs and traditions when they start to live in a new country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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a new theory and culture of

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another region before

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,in India,several societies have been trying to move to Canada even though,the expense is higher in all

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they know about the benefits

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and the enormous job

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otherwise

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the authorities should not give any kind of

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that it is not

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fresh regulations and devotes since it

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give any merits for them.

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that stay in own place rather than to move another destination if not capable to adapt new constitution.

rahul.gauri00

Dec 5, 2021

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