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Some people believe that children should be taught a second language at elementary school. What is your opinion?

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There is an argument among people about whether teaching a
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second
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language
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 to
children
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 at elementary
school
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 should be done or not. While the
children
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’s brains are flexible and ready to learn, there may be difficult for them to learn 2
languages
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 at the same
time
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. In my opinion,
children
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 should not learn a
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second
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language
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 at elementary
school
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. At young ages, the brain is ready and fresh to learn about different things;
thus
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 it is easier for
children
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 to learn.
Moreover
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, because of their young age, they are more flexible and
also
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 more energetic which may be good reasons why learning a
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second
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language
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 in elementary
school
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 would be beneficial for them. As
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proof of
this
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 opinion, I should quote from my grandfather which runs like
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, ’Anything you learn at a young age, it is like engraving something on stone, it will remain fresh and exact for many years ’. I remember that he read many poems for me which helped me to memorize them and I still remember all of those poems clearly.
On the other hand
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, learning two different
languages
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 at the same
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 may be confusing for
children
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. In the
first
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 years of elementary
school
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, pupils are getting familiar with writing and reading skills in their own
language
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 and it is already a big challenge for them.
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, if they face another
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which
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 is totally different from what they already know, they may get confused.
As a result
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 of
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 confusion, they may mix two
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 together and may not be able to distinguish them properly. I have heard from a psychologist that in the
first
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 years of elementary
school
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 when the students are learning how to write and read in their
language
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, making them
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learn another
language
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 at the same
time
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 will be harmful
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 because they will not learn any of those
languages
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 properly which may pose many problems on their future communications. All things considered, teaching elementary pupils a
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second
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language
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 is supported by some people.
Although
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Children
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’s brains are fresh and ready to learn, learning two
languages
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 at the same
time
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 can be challenging for many of them. I think, teaching a
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second
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language
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 to elementary pupils should not be done.

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