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Your company has recently introduced a new work uniform. You are mostly happy with the uniform, but there is one thing that you do not like. Write a letter to your manager. In the letter say what you like about the uniform explain what you don’t you like about the uniform suggest how the uniform can be improved

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Dear Henry, I am writing to draw your attention
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 some benefits and drawbacks of our
company
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's newly introduced
dress
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. First of all, I must appreciate the formal look of
new
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dress
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, the safety facet of
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 uniform is higher
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then
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 standards.
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, newly added reflective
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stars
 around the waist and the fire resistance grade.
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, In my perspective there is one thing in the new
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, that I feel is a negative development. Compared to
old
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 uniform, the number of pockets in
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 one is fewer.
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 modification will introduce some challenges to me, as
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nature
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 of my work I am required to carry a plethora of small tools with me. In the end, I believe that the aforementioned reason can be
imporved
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improved
 to make
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 uniform more appealing and convenient. The
company
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 can request
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the desingers
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desingers
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designers
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 and
manufacturer
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 of the new
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 to add up
few
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 more pockets. I really appreciate the efforts our
company
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 makes for our well-being. As an employee of
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company
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, I am sure that my suggestions will be taken into account. Looking forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, John
Douh
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Dough
.

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style
To further enhance your writing, consider varying your sentence structures and adding more complex expressions. This can add to the sophistication of your writing.
detail
When suggesting improvements, providing specific examples or more detailed proposals could strengthen your argument and show a deeper engagement with the subject.
structure
You have effectively used paragraphs to organize your letter, making your points clear and easy to follow.
tone
Your tone throughout the letter is appropriately formal and respectful, which is suitable for communicating with a manager.
content
You did well in stating what you like about the uniform before addressing your concern, which makes your feedback appear balanced and constructive.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • introduced
  • appreciation
  • pleasing
  • professional image
  • elegant
  • sophistication
  • professionalism
  • high quality
  • appearance
  • comfort
  • modern
  • stylish
  • tailored
  • sleek lines
  • polished
  • discomfort
  • relaxed
  • adjustable
  • beneficial
  • aesthetics
  • commitment
  • valued
  • enhance
  • modifications
  • impression
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