These day, people in many cities know little about their neighbors and do not have a sense of community. What do you think are the causes and what solution can you suggest?

Nowadays, urban dwellers do not participate in communal living and do not know about
people
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around them.
This
is typically city dwellers' lifestyle; some are quite comfortable with it.
However
, there are so many factors that contribute to
this
kind of behaviour,
such
as, busy lifestyles and
sense
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of insecurities, which could be
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remedied by
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people
to have a work-life balance and putting proper
security
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apparatus
in
place
for
people
. It is a known fact that Individuals living in cities are so busy, and some do feel unsafe. Most of the
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,
this
is because everybody has aspirations that they want to fulfil,
such
as having more money, getting a bigger house and so on; leaving them with little or no
time
to know their
sorroundings
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surroundings
.
Furthermore
, the crime rate in
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area are higher than
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, we see many occupants keeping to themselves and not interacting with
people
around them.
For instance
, I once had a neighbour, but I didn't know how he looked like until months later
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because he was working 2 jobs a day and would always lock himself inside his house because of
security
. In a situation like
this
, it is very hard to even get to know each other.
However
, having a proper work-life balance and a proper
security
aparatus
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apparatus
available (
such
as a police patrol car) in the city would do wonders. When folks have a proper-structured
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, they can close early and have enough
time
to see those around them.
Also
seeing
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police parading the streets at any
time
of the day would give the residents a
sense
of
secturity
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security
and thereby they can reach out to
people
around them.
For example
, I stay in a block of flats and I know my co-tenants because I close early and we have a
security
guard in
place
,
this
way we have lots of
time
to interact with each other. Having
this
in
place
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can help residents reach out to each other.
Finally
, folks in metropolitan areas do not know those around them and don't have
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a sense
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of belonging.
This
essay has identified the problems
such
as hectic work schedule and
sense
of insecurity,
also
it has
identfied
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identified
the solutions
such
as having
proper
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work-life balance and having a proper
security
aparatus
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apparatus
in
place
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sense of community
  • neighbors
  • interaction
  • communication
  • busy and fast-paced lifestyles
  • technology
  • social media
  • community events
  • neighborhood watch programs
  • community centers
  • clubs
  • block parties
  • potluck dinners
  • online platforms
  • engagement
  • sense of belonging
  • inclusivity
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