*In many cities an increasing number of people do not know their neighbours and there is lack of a sense of community.* *What are the causes of this problem?* *How can it be solved?*
These days, the number of
people
who do not know their neighbours has been increasing and the sense of community is lost. The main reasons are the excessive use of social media
and busy
competitive Correct article usage
the busy
life
people
are facing, but there are ways to solve problems. In this
essay, I will discuss those problems.
Firstly
, social media
is now rapidly developing and are well-known by not only children but also
adults. Making friends
online boosts an individual's confidence and self-esteem, people
usually feel shy and awkward when talking to new friends
in virtual life
, this
happens with those who have a lot to say but hesitate to speak up for fear of rejection and racism and social media
minimizes that risk. Social media
brings people
safe feelings, allows them to express themselves and it becomes easier to make friends
or speak up about things they couldn’t speak in
real Change preposition
about in
life
. Therefore
, people
preferred making friends
through online learning better than talking in front of people
. Secondly
, people
are living an especially busy and competitive life
, works are now more competitive that
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than
people
work more hours and decrease their talking time with neighbours. Children no longer have good times playing with their neighbour’s friends
when facing more homework and pressures at school, not only that they have to face but also
high expectations on academic levels from their parents. As a result
, adults and children are forced to stay at home rather than spending time interacting with their neighbours such
as visiting home or having dinner together.
In conclusion, the excessive use of social media
and busy competitive life
are the main obstacles that lead to less communicating
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neighbourhood
. Add an article
the neighbourhood
However
, with community support and a personal will to interact with each other, people
can break all these community barriers and create more meaningful relationships with people
in their neighbourhood.Submitted by nandnilekhi on
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