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Cycling is a healthier and more environmentally friendly form of transport. Nevertheless, cycling is getting less popular. What are the reasons of this trend? What can be done to make cycling more popular?

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 argued that mankind has negatively impacted
flora
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 and fauna of
the
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mother
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 Earth and we cannot change it.
While
 others believe that by taking appropriate actions we can surely reverse it.Both the arguments have valid points some of which are discussed below. Today we are living in an era in which we are consuming natural resources at
such
 high speed that our
planet
 is not getting enough time to recover them
hence
, destroying the natural habitat of plants
as well as
 animals. In order to fix the imbalance
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we have created actions like
aforestation
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deforestation
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,Switching
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and switching
 to alternate greener energy sources which include solar energy,wind energy etc. Reducing the
use
 of coal and
patroleum
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petroleum
 as much as possible can be really helpful. Many
organization
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 are
also
 stepping up to take measures to prevent our
planet
 from any
further
 damage.For eg. Tata motors one of the leading car
manufacturer
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manufacturers
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 in India has launched
electric
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 version of their vehicles and many other companies are
also
 following in their footsteps, which will help in
reduction
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 of air
as well as
noice
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noise
 pollution and decrease the
use
 of petroleum. In contradiction to to above
point
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 some people
also
 believe that the damage done to our
wild life
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wildlife
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 has reached
such
 heights that it cannot be reversed.
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 is no Redemption now and we should start looking for other solutions.They
also
 argue that
majority
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 of the world's population is so rigid in their way of living that they are just unwilling to change their habits making any efforts to cure the health of our
planet
 go in vain as a small group of people alone cannot save the world. In my
opinion
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 it is true that we have drastically damaged the natural cycle maintained between plants and animals for centuries by our toxic
life style
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 and careless
atitude
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attitude
 towards our own home
planet
 just for our selfish luxuries but still nothing is incurable.Even small steps taken by us
makes
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 huge improvements in the health of our
planet
.
Also
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 we
dont
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don't
 need to make huge changes in our lifestyle,even small changes like reducing the
use
plastic
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 bag,Using public transport whenever possible,
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Reducing the
use
 of water in our homes are enough
to
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for the betterment of
flora
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the flora
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 and fauna of our
planet
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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