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Many people believe that social networking websites such as facebook and instagram, have had a huge negative impact on both individual and society. To what extent do you agree?

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The line graph compares five influencers regarding their Instagram accounts popularity from 2018 to 2021. Overall, there is an increase in the figure of Instagram
followers
 for all celebrities accounts over time. Whereas, Cristiano Ronaldo has the most popular
account
 with the highest
number
 of
followers
. In 2018, around 110
million
 are followed the Cristiano
account
, which less than Selena Gomez
followers
 by 20
million
. In 2021, the
number
 of people who follow Cristiano increased significantly to around 300
million
,
however
, Selena
account
 rose to 250
followers
, but still the
account
 with the least
number
 of
followers
. The
number
 of
followers
 for the Rock, Ariana and Kylie Jennifer is around the same in 2018. While the Rock
account
 become popular and followed by more than 250
million
, both other accounts rise to almost 250
million
 at the end of the period.
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