You have recently noticed that your work computer is getting too slow and out-of-date. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter -explain the problems with your computer -give some examples of how this has affected your work -make some suggestions for what can be done to help adress this issue

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Dear Mr Manav, I am writing to you regarding my office laptop, which is five years old and processes jobs a lot slower than before. Let me explain the situation, my laptop's design application's license has expired

last

month, which may be the major reason that it is not assisting to process jobs. Every half an hour, my software is restarting by itself, which I have never experienced in my past jobs,

also

my system gets slow while working. The work which I had completed

last

month

also

vanished due to the software license issue and I am unable to save the data which I have prepared previous month. I kindly request to IT security team to look into my laptop's issue and update or renew my system's license, so that I can work properly in my system. I am waiting for your valuable feedback and response because my work productivity is valuable nowadays. Yours Sincerely, XYZ

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Linking words
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

157 words

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