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In order to solve traffic jam and air pollution, governments should promote the use of bicycles and restrict vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#traffic #jam #air #pollution #governments #bicycles #vehicles
According to some people’s consideration,
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bicycle usage should be encouraged and excessive utilize of
vehicles
 should be prevented by governments
for
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 resolve traffic congestion and poor
air
 quality. I definitely agree with
this
 argument. Since the
vehicles
 which majority are powered by fossil fuels cause
the
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ozone layer depletion and
this
 situation directly affect the climate crisis and
air
 pollution. On the one hand, in
todays’
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world
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 the fossil fuels are more utilized in public transportation rather than biofuels and electricity.
Therefore
, the rate of carbon dioxide emissions of exhaust fumes soars drastically day-by-day and
this
 phenomenon boosts global warming and
greenhouse
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 effect in the vast megacities dramatically.
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,
the
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climate change poses a threat for
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human generation as well as species of
animal
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animals
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 and
plant
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plants
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.
Republic
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 of Brazil is a good example to utilize of biofuels.
The half
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 of Brazil population use
biofuel powered
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vehicles
 which are produced from sugar cane fermentation and
this
 way there
are
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 better
air
 quality in there.
On the other hand
,
the
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toxic gas emissions give rise to
air
 pollution in overwhelming metropolises.
Likewise
, the health problems
such
 as respiration disorders, visual delegation
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 up due to
air
 pollution. So the environmental conservation measures must be taken urgently by governments for the healthy life of
future
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the future
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generation
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.
For instance
, according to the World Health Organization called WHO, the current levels of contamination in
air
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the air
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 increased by two
percent
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 and
therefore
 the rate of
the
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health problems reach
more
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 critical level compared to the
last
 year in highly populated countries. As a consequence,
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use
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 of
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bicycles
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bicycle
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bicycles
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 should be supported by governments against
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the
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vehicle
usage
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 for
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 sustainable novel world. Excessive usage of
vehicles
 should be reduced and directly curbed by the ministries.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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