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The exposure of international media such as films, TV and magazines has impacts on local culture. What do you think of the impacts have been? Do you agree that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Films, TV and magazines which are universal
media
 platforms directly affect the local culture of countries.
This
 phenomenon has a good impact on society
such
 as learning novel languages and cultures as well as has a hazardous effect
such
 as looking horrid habits or inappropriate scenes. On the one hand, online platforms are helpful for adults or students to learn recent languages and
moreover
 gather knowledge for their business and educational life. So, pupils can find lots of dissertations to prepare their group assignments easily.
Likewise
, employees can reach much more information to plan their presentations and move up the ladder in their own careers.
For instance
, according to prominent linguist Mark Khul of Baku State University and their colleagues, watching foreign films or series impacts teenagers and adults who want to learn a new language positively.
On the other hand
, global
media
 have several disadvantages on the population
such
 as acquiring bad habits or deterioration of their psychology due to awful scenes they watched.
Furthermore
, the critical scenes in films or series pose a threat
for
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 the pure minds of adolescents drastically. So, they watch movies or series on online software like Netflix and they admire the main characters is played.
Thus
, they influence dramatically these characters and their addictions because of
accessible
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 to
media
 platforms easily.
For example
, according to the article which published popular websites called Psychological Paradox, addictions used central characters like smoking, drinking directly affect deep in majority children mind adversely and
this
 situation destroy their future life greatly. As a consequence, international social and print
media
 have advantages as well as disadvantages on the population of countries. Since, in our technological and digital life, all people access all types of websites, movies, magazines and
therefore
 their local culture becoming vulnerable against changes.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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