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Society is based on rules and laws. It could not function well if individuals were free to do as they please. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Many of our countries are based on
laws
 to keep our
people
 safe, and if everyone could do anything without any limits it won'
t
 work really well
that is
 why rules are created. I genuinely agree with
this
, and in
this
 essay, I am going to discuss the reasons why we need them. Throughout the centuries, as the population kept growing our states crate
laws
 to keep citizens safe from criminality.
This
 is one of the reasons why rules are important, so nobody gets hurt or tries to do anything that can go against a person will.
For instance
, if
people
 would be able to do
such
 actions as stealing or harassing without anybody stopping them, no one would feel safe to live their life.
Although
 it is true that sometimes there are too many
laws
 and it can make us feel bound, but without them, it would create complete anarchy. Regulations can help a country to grow safe,
this
 way it can make
people
 from overseas move to it, where they may don'
t
 find their selves in a safe state. it may be one of the reasons why
people
 choose to leave their homes to go to Australia where the rules are quite strict but
also
 really good to live in a peaceful environment. If
this
 wouldn'
t
 apply many other parts of the world would fall apart. In conclusion,
laws
 are made for a reason and without
them
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 we would be lost. In my personal opinion, I sustain the fact that we need them even if sometimes they are too many but at least we can live in a nice environment where we don'
t
 need to worry about any kind of offence.
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