You successfully passed a job interview. You are expected to start on November 15, but you will not be available on that date. Task: Write a letter to your new boss, explaining your situation, expressing your concern and suggesting a solution.

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Dear Mr. Smith, I am writing to you regarding my job's start day, which

has been

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supposed to be

25th

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the 25th

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of July, 2024. I am unfortunately unable to start at the due date since I have been diagnosed to require passing an emergency operation on 1st of July.

This

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surgery was supposed to be done on

15th

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the 15th

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of June;

however

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, it has been postponed because my doctor will be on a working trip at that time. Please accept my apology and change the date, when I should start my work.

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, I

should

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miss the precious opportunity of being a member of your esteemed organization, which will be an extremely heartbreaking experience for me. If

change

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a change

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of date were possible, I would be truly

honored

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to start my work just

few

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a few

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days after my recovery, which will be

23rd

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the 23rd

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of July. I really appreciate your kind understanding and I look forward to getting your reply, Faithfully yours, Maria Sobhani

Submitted by mojgan.sobhani on Fri Jun 07 2024

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task achievement

Make sure to clarify the original start date versus the revised start date you wish to propose to avoid confusion. It might be helpful to explicitly state the number of days or to summarize in a concluding sentence.

coherence cohesion

Ensure all sentences are complete and grammatically correct. Phrases such as 'to require passing an emergency operation' could be rephrased to 'requiring an emergency operation' to sound more natural.

task achievement

The tone of the letter is very respectful and considerate, which is suitable for this kind of communication.

coherence cohesion

The letter has clear paragraphs, each with a distinct focus, making it easy to follow the narrative.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

159 words

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