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Every year serveral languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the wolrd To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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As globalization develops, a number of regions and places start to use the same
language
 for communication. But some of the regions lose their
language
 because of
this
 trend. Some people argue that fewer
languages
 existing will make the world much easier. From my perspective, there are bright sides and dark sides to
this
 question. The diversity of
language
 makes our world vivid. Many countries and regions cultural development is based on their own
language
. It provided a different logical framework and thinking method for understanding the surrounding environment and problems we faced.
For example
, Chinese is the
language
 more concentrated on expressing abstract content.
On the contrary
, English is more straightforward to express with its strong logical framework. Those two
languages
 express the same problem with different words component as well as the sentence and pronunciation.
As a result
, the artwork reflected by the impact of
language
 is different in the two countries.
However
, life won't be easier with fewer
languages
, whether global commercial activities or financial development, relative elements
such
 as political benefits and geography differences are more important than the
language
 itself.
Similarly
, for inventing a new type of vaccine to reduce the pandemic from covid-19. The method is not to erase as many
languages
 as possible,
instead
 of working globally with different agencies, communities and countries to find out an approachable and efficient approach for the world. Overall, all
languages
 are necessary whether it is for daily use or cultural development, and remaining fewer
languages
 won't make life easier, except to work together with a positive influence on life. And I disagree with
this
 point of view.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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