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Some people believe that university education should be free for everyone, regardless of their financial background. Others think that students should pay for their higher education. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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People often argue that irrespective of
students
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' financial background they should be provided with free
university
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education
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.
In contrast
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, Others feel that higher
education
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 should not be free of cost.
This
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 essay will discuss both views and my opinion will provided
at the end
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. Providing
university
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education
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 free of cost regardless of
students
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' financial situation will benefit in
country
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 development.Because
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fund
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 will not be the factor now, most of them will be interested in pursuing their higher
education
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 in their desired domain.
As a result
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, the College dropout rate will be reduced and many skilled persons will be produced in the countries.
In addition
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,The
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 which was saved for their
education
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 can be used to invest in developing their own company.which will be helpful in building the country's economy.
For instance
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,Elon Musk who completed his
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education
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 with scholarship
money
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, he received from the government, used the
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 he saved for his
university
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education
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 to build his own company called PayPal.It not only benefited him, but that was
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 helpful in creating employment for others
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,it
also
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 boosted the country's economy.
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,Financial aid which will be received through
university
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education
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 fees will be helpful for the
university
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. College infrastructure will be developed with that
money
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, and
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, it will help
students
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 get a better learning experience.
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, that amount will be invested in appointing talented teaching staff who are academically strong as many of the excellent professors take a heavy salary.
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,Most of the top
university
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 professors charge high in salary because their teaching style is so captivating for
students
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. In conclusion,
although
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 paying for
university
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 tuition fees will benefit the
university
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, it is not feasible for
students
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 having financial problems.
On the other hand
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, Free
university
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education
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 is beneficial for both
students
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 and countries economy.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to paraphrase the essay prompt and provide clear transitions between ideas to enhance flow. Avoid abrupt starts and ends to paragraphs.
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Add more detailed examples to better support your main points. This will help illustrate your arguments more vividly.
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Clarify your own opinion more explicitly, perhaps in the conclusion. Consider stating it directly rather than implying it.
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You presented both views effectively and made a solid attempt to argue for free education, which shows a balanced understanding of the topic.
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The examples you offered, like Elon Musk, were relevant and helped illustrate your points, demonstrating your ability to connect theory to real-world situations.
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