You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some people think that physical strength is important for success in sport, while other people think that mental strength is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. You should write at least 250 words.

It is believed that bodily
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vital to
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sucess
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success
in
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sport
comparied
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compared
to
the
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intellectual ones. The
overwhelmening
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overwhelming
majority of people do reckon the
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bodily skill
is more important due to its
hability
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ability
and to limbering up in
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of someone who
possess
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the
power
.
For instance
the best and beloved sporters around the world as Cristiano Ronaldo and Michael
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Tyson
,
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are
strongers
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stronger
strangers
and use their bodies as the way to overcome hurdles during the games.
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onother
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another
side
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many people do respect more mental side of the
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outlets
athletes
due to the
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ways of facing the games.
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clear example of
this
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Messi,
dispite
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despite
his lower stature he has the highest mental
power
among footballers, which make him possible to
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dribble
and score goals very easily and quickly. Mind you, my personal and modest opinion
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is to value more the intellectual
power
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its naturality in person. I mean, the stamina it's possible to aquired with tons of willing to get it, differently with the cognitive strength which can be
also
be got using the
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training
,
however
nothing compared to the mental
power
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natural
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way. All
to
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all, It is
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and very
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to precisely say whether getting bodily or intellectual
hability
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ability
is better than
onother
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another
due to his ways of
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each other. A very good atlet of any sort of sport must or should have both habilities so that he
he
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can thrive. As the experience shows the nowadays players normally tend to excel in both and more skills.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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