Sports today is turning into a business and there are companies involved that sponsors sports with ever growing prize money for the sportsmen as a part of their advertising. Some people agree to this because it has a good effect on the world of sports, other disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The growing economy of the world is witnessing

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of opportunities in the field of

sports

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from business

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. The idea of

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making

money

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from

sports

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advertisements

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by providing sponsorship to the sportsperson has been supported by a certain group of people.

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, there are certain people who

dont

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don't

support

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way of marketing. In the following

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we would discuss both the views of

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kind of marketing gimmick. The idea of taking

sports

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as a profession in

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today's

younger generation

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encouraged by their parents

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years. In a country like India where millions of youth want to excel their career in

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is not only because of passion but

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huge

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amount of

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it brings into their life. The businesses

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to be in

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the eyes of the people by providing sponsorship to the most beloved sportsperson.

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, Virat Kohli who is the most admired cricketer in the world

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is being sponsored by Nike. The company is responsible to provide him

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sports related

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equipment's

equipments

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which are needed by him and in return he has to endorse the brand on television and

also

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on other social media platforms.

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way the company attracts more and more customers who admire Kohli and end up buying products of that company.

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, on the other side, there are some disadvantages of

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startegy

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strategy

being

adotped

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adopted

by the companies.

Increasing

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influx of

money

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into

sports

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brings along the dark clouds of corruption into it.

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, a book by Abhay

chaudhry

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on famous Indian cricketer Azarudin revealed that he was involved in the

match fixing

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. He had

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hefty

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amount of

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from the sponsors to act as per their needs.

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resulted in tarting the image of his own and of the cricket.

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to it, too many sponsorers take away the charm of the game, because

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they are the ones who are controlling the game. In a nutshell, I would like to conclude that

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of the sponsors in

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sports

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is not a bad idea

untill

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until

and unless it is done in a regulated manner without harming the charm of the game and its spirit.

jay.becl

Dec 8, 2021

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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