Sports today is turning into a business and there are companies involved that sponsors sports with ever growing prize money for the sportsmen as a part of their advertising. Some people agree to this because it has a good effect on the world of sports, other disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The growing economy of the world is witnessing
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of opportunities in the field of
sports
from business
perspectives
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. The idea of
the
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making
money
from
sports
advertisement
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by providing sponsorship to the sportsperson has been supported by a certain group of people.
However
, there are certain people who
dont
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don't
support
this
way of marketing. In the following
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we would discuss both the views of
such
kind of marketing gimmick. The idea of taking
sports
as a profession in
todays
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today's
younger generation
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encouraged by their parents
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past
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years. In a country like India where millions of youth want to excel their career in
sports
is not only because of passion but
also
to
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amount of
money
it brings into their life. The businesses
wants
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to be in
to
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the eyes of the people by providing sponsorship to the most beloved sportsperson.
For instance
, Virat Kohli who is the most admired cricketer in the world
,
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is being sponsored by Nike. The company is responsible to provide him
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the
sports related
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equipment's
equipments
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which are needed by him and in return he has to endorse the brand on television and
also
on other social media platforms.
This
way the company attracts more and more customers who admire Kohli and end up buying products of that company.
However
, on the other side, there are some disadvantages of
such
advertisement
startegy
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strategy
being
adotped
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adopted
by the companies.
Increasing
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influx of
money
into
sports
brings along the dark clouds of corruption into it.
For example
, a book by Abhay
chaudhry
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on famous Indian cricketer Azarudin revealed that he was involved in the
match fixing
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. He had
took
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hefty
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amount of
money
from the sponsors to act as per their needs.
This
resulted in tarting the image of his own and of the cricket.
In addition
to it, too many sponsorers take away the charm of the game, because
then
they are the ones who are controlling the game. In a nutshell, I would like to conclude that
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of the sponsors in
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sports
is not a bad idea
untill
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until
and unless it is done in a regulated manner without harming the charm of the game and its spirit.
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