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School aged students should be taught how to manage money. Do you agree or disagree

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The youth should be taught how to manage money .
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 a good idea to make students regularly. It is true to say that,the teachers should teach the students how they must live;
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,it can not be a great attitude,teaching them like their course lessons,while they should be placed in a real circumstance making them understand that if they did not manage their money,they would be faced with the worth situation
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 these educational programs should be taught in a practical method,theoretical training should not be missed.In fact,these are complemented each other.Not only could
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 make them good managers in their life,but
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 they could save their cash until the
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 day of months or they have extra payment for the essential circumstances. To conclude,all of the life attitudes should teach them
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an earlier age since they could learn better when they are young.The fewer age,the better learn.
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