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Nowadays, most large companies operate multi-nationally. To what extent those companies should have responsibility towards local communities in which they operate?

There is a controversial notion heating a debate over the fact that there are numerous
enterprises
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 carrying out multi-nationally. From my perspective, it is reasonable that those
companies
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 ought to be accountable for the local communities in terms of the
environment
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 and employment in which they run. Without a shadow of a doubt,
enterprises
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 should create jobs for local
people
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 in which they operate.
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 the time being, unemployment is a pressing issue that cannot be completely resolved so global
companies
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 have a significant role in handling these problems by hiring
people
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in
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 all walks of life to ensure they have
stable
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a stable
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income
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incomes
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 to have better living standards.
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,Samsung operates an enterprise named Samsung Electronics
Vietnam
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 which has offered job opportunities for over 40
thousands
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people
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 in
Vietnam
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 after nearly 10 years in
Vietnam
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. Thanks to
this
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 company, the living standards of local
people
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 rise significantly and more
people
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 have chances to get access to numerous vocations.
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, it is undeniable that worldwide
enterprises
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 do wonders for the local communities.
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, the
environment
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 is
also
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 one of the most crucial issues that all global
companies
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 should be liable for. There is a wide range of
companies
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 that construct factories abroad, which may cause alarming environmental issues in that country.
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, a company from Taiwan called Formosa discharged waste into the ocean of
Vietnam
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 in 2016, causing mass death of marine animals in Quang Binh beach.
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 why
companies
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 should apply a treatment system to protect the local communities’ health and the quality of the
environment
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.
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, all
enterprises
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 should take responsibility for
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environment
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environmental
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 conservation. In conclusion, employment and
environment
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 are the most essential issues that should be taken responsibility
by
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for by
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 global
companies
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.

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