Write about the following topic. Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or is the price of their fame an invasion into their private life? Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
The subject of showing famous
people
on the media
is creating a debate between the public. Some think it is a violation for
privacy, Change preposition
of
however
others say that well-known persons should afford the cost of their stardom by paying time from their personal Add a comma
,however
life
. In my opinion, popular people
should be often given some solitude by all.
From first
side of view, celebrated Change the article
the first
people
suffer on daily basis from lack of privacy. Actually, journalists tend to follow a celebrity to his house, to his workplace and to public spaces in order
to collect some shocking truth for the public. For instance
, many people
may prefer to buy a magazine or a journal with a headline about someone who is considered a perfect ideal to them. In addition
, many social media
creators are exposing some hilarious or insulting materials in order
to make some profits without considering the feelings or the opinions of the star: subject of these materials. Many influencers are gaining more fame by using others' failures on virtual
Add an article
a virtual
the virtual
platform
Change the noun form
platforms
such
as Facebook, Instagram, and YouTube.
From
the flip side, famous persons are using their individual Change preposition
On
life
in order
to expand their popularity. Currently, the development of social media
helped many young celebrities to show their daily activities, and their followers are more attached with
their Change preposition
to
contents
. Like Cristiano Ronaldo, he is a great football player who was able to show us his Fix the agreement mistake
content
life
outside the pitch in an amazing way. Moreover
, some famous personalities make use of media
for their real
Add a hyphen
real-life
life
shows such
as the Kardashian family and Opera.
However
, it is important for me that everyone get
their free space. In fact, both famous and ordinary Change the verb form
gets
people
prefer to have some solitude
Replace the word
solitary
life
in order
to flee from depression and anxiety. Activities such
as bush walk
, a vacation in Correct your spelling
bushwalk
water
villa at the beach or hunting in Add an article
a water
wild
forest. In plus, Add an article
the wild
a wild
be
followed all the time will increase the sense of personal insecurity. Wrong verb form
being
People
have the right to feel safe in their basic environment
Change the noun form
environments
such
as their home, their workplace, and their neighbor
.
In conclusion, Change the spelling
neighbour
the
society and the government can’t forbid the Correct article usage
apply
media
from doing their job by tracking celebrities’ steps. But they must organize the medias’ activities in a very convenient way for the famous people
in order
to let them enjoy a small personal spaceSubmitted by eng.ali.hammoud.26 on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite