The government should lower the budget on the arts in order to allocate more money to education. To what extent do you agree?

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echnology

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society,

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seems to be the most important aspect to be focused.

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, there are many arguments between the problem that the

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should save money to develop

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instead

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of

arts

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. Even though I certainly disagree with

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opinion, I

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understand why some people have

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thinking. On one hand, the reasons for which they give to lower the budget on the

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are seemingly reasonable.

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, lowering the expenses on the

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is the way t

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the

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i

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the quality of facilities in schools. Since humans think that art is redundant in society, they consider

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as entertainment methods, do not play an important role in their lives or even the economy.

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,

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requires many new e

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to support t

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eaching. Due to the d

eveloping

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of technology, there must be some new innovations in the way of transmission of knowledge.

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, some productive and r

evenue generating

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skills

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to students to prepare for their future. Following these reasons, the spending in

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should be lower to invest in

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overnment.

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agreement. There are many benefits that the

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bring to our life.

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,

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, in any a

spects,

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are the methods for dwellers to relax, to release their stress after working i

n

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a long period. By investing in

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,

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overnment

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can encourage residents to encourage people who are keen on

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to gage in art, pursue a career too. E

very one

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knows that

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is crucial,

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, but for

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, students may feel extremely s

tressful

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after learning for a day.

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,

arts

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is not only an entertainment production but

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a new source for students to collect knowledge about our culture, to support their schooling.

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,

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overnment

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should invest in

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due to the best way to preserve tradition and culture. To draw a conclusion, despite m

any

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benefits that

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brings to our life,

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is

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an important aspect that we cannot deny.

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should balance the expenditure i

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both art and

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, it will help the country to grow comprehensively.