In many countries ,small shops are closing.Give your reasons about this also is it a positive or a negative development?

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era of infrastructure development, big shopping centres and malls are opening rapidly which causes adverse effects on small
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and stores, they are getting closed day by day. I believe
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it has cons and pros
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. These small shops provide local items to consumers
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the giant malls have branded items for the customers, I have explained my points of view on
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paragraphs. To commence with the side effects of mitigating a trend of small stores, these small vendors
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from middle-class backgrounds where they generally start
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from their life savings. If people
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not pay attention to these home
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, it would be disadvantageous for them.
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,
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businesses
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always have specialities in services and products which can't be available at branded stores,
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, small Mexican taco store always has authentic taste in Mexican food which can't get at the well-known food chain TacoBell. On the other side, the advantageous part of the shopping plazas
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,
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that they
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have so many international goods available that
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many choices for the customers.
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, they
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make buyers aware of the trending styles and fashion.
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, Zara is
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famous retail outlet for clothes which has fashionable designs of trousers and tops, which can't be found
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the small outlets.
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to that, big brands are able to provide different offers and schemes which is nearly impossible for small stalls as they are bound with little profit margins.
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as BestBuy the electronic store offers home appliances on monthly EMIs.
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, as lavish brands and spacious malls are increasing, small
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are decreasing. But
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play a vital role in society, so the government should understand the importance of
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and should make policies which make sure that
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small and big shops can survive equally in the market.
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