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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationship people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

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Although
 it is the age of globalization,technology has a great impact on major changes in the modern world.in
this
 ,age a number of
people
 express their feeling by applying different sorts of
devices
 which come up with advances in technology.it is obvious that modern machine has a knockback on the human natural relationship.To illustrate that social media and the use of the different electric
devices
.I
thus
 believe it has negative
tend
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 outweigh to positive aspects. To Commence with,over the
last
 few decades human relationships getting weakened because of excessive use of social networks.
However
,maintaining the connection with
friends
 and family is in the name of a show-off.
people
 becoming more unsocial in real life.
For example
, the majority of
people
is
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 more friendly on Facebook with unknown guys but in reality, he does not take care of his near and dear
friends
.
As a result
,extreme use of Facebook Instagram and other social networks make
people
 less important to the real near relationships.
On the other hand
, using a variety of accessible technological
devices
people
 do not get enough time to look over their close relative and
friends
 which is greatly influence connection to make it stronger.even young children get affected by negative aspects of electric types of equipment.
For instance
,due to the smart facilities of the new iPhone
people
 get attraction,they spend more time operating
this
 even nowadays gossiping with
friends
 and families almost vanished because of mobile and internet.
Therefore
,electric
devices
 make us more unfamiliar to our dearest
people
. To conclude, in my opinion using negative aspects of modern technology
people
 getting unfriendly which is the impact on our social phenomenon.
thus
, we should be more positive to carry on in the relationship.
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