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The internet will never replace traditional course books in school. How far do you agree with this prediction?

#internet #course #books #school #prediction
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From my perspective, now
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internet
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help
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 a
lot
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teacher
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teachers
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,
doctor
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doctors
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, police
officer
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 and so on. Sometimes pupils look up new
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different
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subject
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. But, they are not going to choose
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.
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, it is often augured which of education very helpful for young generation. I will discuss both of them.
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advantage
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 and disadvantages.
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, I want to write about
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advantage
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 side. It is useful
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in
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. I used to
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by
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.
The
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internet
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of
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books
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 that help you for education.
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books
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of
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belong to subjects. It is
not
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problem
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seem
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 to me that a
lot
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 of pupils look for
information
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 about homework. They copy out
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 and send
teacher
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. It is easy and convenient.
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pupil
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pupils
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 can find
of
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different online
course
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consist
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 of
interesting
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subject
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. You search
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subject
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 and turn
on
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. Online course helps self-education. At the same time, a
lot
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 of
children
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a foreign universities
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from
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online. According to
me
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,
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 will change traditional
books
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 in school. Maybe it will be after ten
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. I am not sure. In my opinion, it will be useful.
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, I believe that
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 will not change traditional
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belong
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 to
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. I have different
reason
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think
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 about it.
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education
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 system for
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subject
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 in Uzbekistan.
Govement
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Government
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 out a
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 of
books
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ever
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 year for school. They do not want
what
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children
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spend
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 of useless time.
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 reason, I think
children
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 must read a
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books
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, because its increate knowledge. Nowadays, a
lot
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 of young
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They
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 and do not pay attention
literature
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to literature
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books
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. Of course,
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if
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 is miserable. In my opinion, we must find
of
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new methods for improving
knowledge
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our
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 generation. I think we should be
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 two ways. We should enter study process
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 together.
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