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The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is predicted that the average level of
people
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's
health
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 will be deteriorated as compared to today. I agree with
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 statement because the increasing
demand
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 for fast
food
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 and technological advancements will lead to a more sedentary life than it is now. The primary reason why the
health
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 of
people
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 will be affected and it will be lower is that the
demand
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 for fast
food
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 is increasing day by day so lots of
restaurants
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 will be opened in near future. If many
restaurants
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 open in every corner, it will be easy for
people
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 to go out and dine in the
restaurants
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.
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, a survey in Canada predicted that around 400
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 are going to open in Canada because of the high
demand
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 for fast
food
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 so the rate of obesity will be increased than it is now. The
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 reason why
people
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's
health
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 will be lower in the future is because of the advancement of more sophisticated technology which will make us lazier.
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 is because life will be more comfortable because of the technology, so we will not have to work by hand because most of the work will be done by machines.
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, it will encourage a more sedentary life due to which it gives rise to many diseases.
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, According to a newspaper in London, scientists are preparing a machine, which will help individuals in cleaning up and doing other household chores. In conclusion, it is clear that because of the high
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 for fast
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such
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 as burgers, pizza, and,
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 with the invention of more advancements in technology,
people
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 will become lazier which will decline the level of
people
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's
health
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Standard of health
  • 2. Average
  • 3. Lower
  • 4. Future
  • 5. Aging population
  • 6. Chronic diseases
  • 7. Sedentary lifestyle
  • 8. Lack of exercise
  • 9. Poor dietary habits
  • 10. Environmental pollution
  • 11. Technological advancements
  • 12. Impact on health
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