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Open plan office no walls no barriers. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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There is a controversial idea heating a debate over the fact that
open plan
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open-plan
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 office offers no walls and no barriers.
This
 phenomenon has both pros and cons.
However
, the advantage still outweighs its counterpart. On the one hand,
this
 type of workspace might cause distractions for the employees of the company.
In other words
, almost all workers gathering together in one offered spacious room while doing their distinct tasks will adversely affect each other.
This
 is a chaotic and annoying situation where a bunch of departments is working in different requirements for working conditions at the same time and in the same place.
For example
, employees doing telesales, with their
loudly
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 voices, might disturb copywriters who need to sustain their concentration.
Hence
, allowing no privacy might do harm to the quality of work.
On the other hand
, while the drawback of applying open office is widely acknowledged, it is unwise to ignore its redeeming features.
First
 of all, the interaction among workers could increase,
therefore
lead
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 to higher productivity. It can be explained more clearly that the more chances for colleagues to encounter
with
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each other on a daily basis, the closer they are as well as gradually form good relationships which
contributes
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 to a healthy workplace.
As a result
, there are strong bonds among them which can be considered as a motivation for them to willingly put effort to work every day.
Secondly
, a simply designed room might act as a precursor for a company with
limited
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a limited
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 budget as there is no walls are built. All in all, offering an open workplace is of tremendous
benefits
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benefit
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 to its enterprise. To sum up,
open
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the open
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 plan office adopted might bring both positive and negative impacts on its firm.
However
, the merits cannot overshadow its counterpart.
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